ThinkWrite Challenge LI

Question

BHughes kindly passed the Torch to me. It's an honour to be given the opportunity to set the first ThinkWrite Challenge on this new site.

Listed below are words that MUST be included in your creation, if you want to be considered for the post of TB. Word count maximum: 175. Again, if you go over the limit, you won't be considered.

Good luck.

Affluent
Construction
Liaison
Prone
Spirit
Unlikely

Competition closes 28th July. I know it's a short deadline, but it's a short word count, and a short word list!

Comments

morshy - thank you very much for setting up this challenge here.

Sorry to read your comment on ThinkDraw about not liking this site. The platform here is much more flexible so if you send your suggestions we may be able to improve it for you.

Answer 1

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I couldn’t help watching them.  Witnessing the humble beginnings of love.  A beautiful woman.  An affluent young man.  Their passion was apparent as he brushed tendrils of hair from her face.  She leaned her body into his.  Such a radiant smile.  She really was beautiful.  So free-spirited.  I doubt the two of them had ever been prone to so much laughter.  It was unlikely they even knew I was watching; they were so rapt with each other.  

I snapped a picture and wondered—was this the fundamental construction of something that would last lifetimes?  Or simply a liaison that would soon fade from memory?  Regardless of what it would become, right now—in this moment—they were happy.

It was almost a shame to have to call her husband.

Comments

I was getting ready to call you syrupy or sappy, but then you snapped the rat trap!  Excellent twist.

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yes, good twist.

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aw...sweet and sad.

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what a nice story, IG!

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congrats inky!  Looking forward to the next edition.

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inked, how did you get the background green?

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polenta, I believe morshy chose this story out as the "Best Response".  The way I understand it the person who starts the challenge can do that if they choose to.

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THANK YOU DRAGON We are still learning, aren't we?

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Ooo, this is good ... the sting in the tale.

Answer 2

I am not an affluent person but my spirit is prone to build a liaison with anyone who is likely to experience a new construction of life. COULD IT BE YOU?

Comments

:) only 31 words :)

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nice job

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very nice, polenta! great to see something from you!

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I'm having enough trouble with the old one to keep me busy but I wish you luck, polenta. Clever use of the word list.

Answer 3

Hieroglyphics

Under construction for many moons the great pyramids of Egypt rose from the sand as the final resting place of royalty.  Spirits guard the tombs of the dead and act as a liaison between the dimensional stratus of the living and the deceased.  Curses also guard the resting of the affluent making it highly unlikely for their discovery.

Prone to human curiosity many have desecrated the sanctity of the spirits and stolen their treasures and remains.

Comments

Congrats Morshy!  Hey, give this a whirl.  We might like it.  Hopefully the other ThinkWriters and followers will find us. :)

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Doug, you copied this from National Geographic didn't you?  Just kidding.  Simple and to the point.  Really, really good use of the word list too.  :)

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Hey "inky", I never copy anything.  That is why my ThinkDraw piks are never beautiful rembrants.  I only do originals.  Does kinda sound National Georgraphicish. lol.

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sounds like a voice over at the beginning of a mummy movie.  good job.

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I agree...sounds very much like national geographic, or maybe a narrative on a travel show. wonderfully descriptive.

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Doug, I've never seen the pyramids in real life, but you just transported me there.

Answer 4

DEVIL'S  PLAY  (It's 226 words without title)

As they say, it's as unlikely for a camel to pass through the eye of a needle as for an afflluent man to get into heaven.  Well heaven was very old and starting to deteriorate so God tried to make a deal with the devil through a neutral laison.  He needed real workers and all the spirits in heaven were harp players - none knew the first thing about construction.

So God knew he had to cut a deal.  All the working types were prone to drinking and smoking pot, but now he just needed to borrow a few souls from Satan.  'Hell'  He thought 'is so miserable, I'm sure at least a few will jump at the offer.  Three weeks in heaven in exchange for their services in fixing up this dump'.

Well the rich men who couldn't get through the hole in the needle siezed the opportunity.  "They want to talk, God."  the go-between said.  "They want air conditioning and ice cubes once a week."

"No way."  said God.  "What would happen to the phrase 'hot as hell' if I cater to their sorry asses?"

"God, what are you going to do about these crumbling towers?"

"They can go to hell.  I doomed those souls and they'll stay doomed.  We have sleeping bags and plenty of soft clouds to lounge on.  That's my decision.  Go tell them."

Comments

fun story.

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hehe, love the idea of God cutting a deal with the sinners.

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This is one of the best things I've read by you, I think. Very creative and fun!

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very funny giraffe.  You made it believable.

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loved this!

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Heavens!  Did the 'workers' try to negotiate?

Answer 5

Title: Ghostwritten Obituary  (9 words)

Affluent liaison.  Unlikely spirit.  Found prone at construction site.

Comments

LOL Five!!!

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Perfect, fifth.

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WOW! (1 word)

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nicely done!

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Great imagination.

Answer 6

Definition of a rich poltergeist:

Affluent spirit prone to construction of unlikely liaisons.

Comments

another good one!  Is this going to be "shortest gets the torch?" lol.

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good one  (you left out "construction").

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lol, lol, lol

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Doug, who on earth wants a torch? LOL  (it's a joke Doug)

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dint leave out nuffin...:p

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nice edit ;)

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"poor" poltergeist:  

Spirit unlikely prone to construction of affluent liaisons.  :)

Answer 7

138 words not including title (142 if you do include it)

A Change of Mindset

She was an affluent heiress who’d never thought of anyone but herself.  It seemed she was the most unlikely person to end up prone in the mud protesting the construction of a dam.  She’d been chosen as a young, trendy liaison to try to talk the protesters out their self inflicted hand-cuffs.  Instead they’d talked to her about natural habitats and the loss of homes and farmland and her spirit had suddenly found wings.  Here she could do something important; here she could actually matter instead of being some little Paris Hilton wannabe.  So she lay down in the mud in front of the backhoes and dump trucks with her new found, environmentally aware friends and wondered how angry her father would be when he found out she was the one holding up the work on his dam.

Comments

Spoiled rich girl becoming environmentally conscious and deciding to piss of daddy? I like it!

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Right.  It brings up 'How much is heartfelt and how much is Daddy rebellion?'  Nicely done.

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An interesting idea, Dragon.

Answer 8

A spirited liaison of affluent construction workers is prone to be unlikely...

Comments

"spirited" being the key word.  I don't think I've ever seen a spirited bunch.  Maybe affluent, but spirited unlikely.

Answer 9

The construction of liaisons with affluent young women was unlikely to leave his spirits prone.

Comments

What's all this? Comments are soon going to be longer than the whole stories!!!! It seems people think BLACK IS BEAUTIFUL, POOR IS PROUD, CHEAP IS CHALLENGING..................and SHORT IS SIMPLE, SUPERB, SACRED, SOLEMN AND SUPERFICIAL...... but never ever STUPID! Signed: Naughty Girl

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oh, I forgot SUBLIME.

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... impudent ... clever ... but never stupid.

Answer 10

128 words....no title.

  Henry grew up on the affluent side of obesity.  Raised on cream puffs and escargot he became quite a large child with a jelly belly that shimmied in the sunshine.  He wore expensive custom sewn shirts that still didn’t quite contain his portly girth.  In adulthood Henry became a construction foreman for his father’s empire.  Never one to be a liaison for the common worker he huffed and puffed barking barbaric orders to his crew while perched on a platform high above them.

One sunny day a giggling gathering of spirited steel workers hoisted themselves up to Henry’s perch.  With a thunderous bang of a dozen hammers hitting cold hard steel Henry jumped into the air falling off his perch and landing prone on the hard ground below.

Comments

I guess they didn't like him, then.