Think-write challenge LXXXV

Question

This is my first challenge so patience please.   I am not setting a theme for this ThinkWrite challenge, so go ahead and write about any topic you'd like! As always, no poetry please and feel free to use any form of the word, be it a plural, past/future tense, etc.   I hope you all have fun.

Word List:

Faqir

monkey

dance

music

turban

glacier

date

zill

Word Limit: Minimum = none. Maximum = 400 words.

 

Glad no one saw this before today I forgot a time limit.   Lets say March 29th.

Comments

I'm not saying its an important issue... but I've been with TW since the 20 editions, and its always been 10 words and a fairly limiting word count.... so I was just wondering whether that's a known thing or not.  :)  I don't mind if TW evolves slowly, but I just wanted to address it... :)
Thank you!

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i am going to give this one more week and then Randy1ee will win by default.

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Ladyhwin is correct.  If there is one tradition in ThinkWrite that has carried on through the "ages", it is that the list must be 10 words.  I'm sure the next torchbearer will revert back to the tradition.  Thanks!  Wow, what a word list tho', a challenge indeed.

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This challenge will be over by Wednesday .  I think in future we need to tell people who have never posted before things like number of words wanted in the list.   This was my first challenge and i had a lot of problems.   I now have figured out tags,  and i will make sure in the future to have ten words.  I also know I need to give a little more time.  So for those of you who need two more words try adding ballet and pocket.

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I'm sorry that you had so much trouble. I agree that some things are difficult to get a hang of. If you have any questions at any time, don't hesitate to ask through comments or private messaging. In the meantime, this could help: http://www.thinkwrites.com//3296/guidelines-and-help

Answer 1

Closing my eyes I am in the market, a part of the humanity that is dancing to the music that is life. The high notes of the zill beckoning me this way and the bass of the hawkers driving me that way. I am twirled and swirled along the path. I am delighted by the date monger who offers a sample of his wares and startled by the monkey that steals my turban so a child can pick my pocket. I feel sorry for the child, so desperate that he would try to take from a penniless faqir, just down from a year's meditation by the glacier. If I had anything I would share it with him.

How I miss this. Maybe my mother was right. I am not cut out for this. but...

I open my eyes and I am awash with the symphony of the natural world. Sometimes a quiet and slow ballad of the glacier as it caresses the earth and sometimes a raucous movement highlighting it's futile struggle to free itself from the earth's grasp. Next a the playful aerial ballet of the birds in their mating flight accompanied by the far off mating call of some hooved creature.

I would miss this so much. I am where I am supposed to be.

Ah, to be human, to want to have two things at the same time that I can not have at the same time.

I'll sit here to ponder this for the next while... a year or so.

 

Comments

This created clear and beautiful pictures in my mind.  I felt like I was walking through the bazaar or sitting by the glacier.  Very well done.

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Okay the torch is yours.  remember  you need ten words in your wordlist.  have fun.

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OK, that is ten words plus two for the two you missed? just kidding,

Serious Q though, what is usually a good amount of time?

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approximately five to six weeks i think.   Four wasn't quite enough.

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Two weeks used to be standard, but yeah, these days I would give it at least a month.

Answer 2

Faqir, the monkey danced to the music of the turban bearers, making the glacier one fun place to be on this date - at least that's what I thought until a zill flew at me and hit me square on the forehead.

Comments

Sorry, that's the best I could do.

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LOL..it made me laugh.

Answer 3

I sit on the stone and snow under me as I view the icy blue of the glaciers under me. The cool song of the wind passes by my ears, chilling and refreshing me, the only music I need to make my moment atop a mountain seem profound. It is a long way down the side of this tall, jagged hill, and I know the monkeys and asses back home will mock me if I don't make it back home by dusk. However, I want to simply enjoy this moment while it lasts. So I sit, enjoying the cool song of the wind caressing my ears and the warm, inviting dance of the sun on my cheeks.

I must begin my trek back down.

 

Grabbing my pack, I sigh, looking once more down at the perfect blue of the glaciers and the brilliant green of the trees below. Step by struggled step, I slowly make my way down the mountain. I see the sun start to fade behind another grand mountain and realize I must hurry. I must go back home before anyone knows I've gone.

Comments

Your new and i wasn't clear in the challenge.  I will be in the future, especially since this is very well done.  The idea is to use all the words in the word list.  Thanks for your response,
Arscarvi

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Hi, sfifarek and welcome to ThinkWrite. Apparently the few of us who have been here longer have forgotten how difficult it is for anyone new to grasp all the traditions that have been established here. At some point we wrote a site guide and maybe that will help you on your way, especially since your response has been picked as best in another challenge. You can find it here: http://www.thinkwrites.com//3296/guidelines-and-help.
If you have any other questions, feel free to ask.
As arscarvi said, the point of this challenge is to use all the words from the list. It might be a fun exercise to go back and include the words that are missing.
Now, about the story. It looks really good and interesting. However, for some reason, I don't find myself being pulled into it. Unfortunately, I can't tell you what's missing, or what could be improved. It probably just didn't hit the spot for me. Keep writing though, you're doing a good job. :)