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Fill in the Plot VI

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This challenge was up for a while and no responses were submitted. Now I'm trying again. Maybe some of the new people here would like to give it a shot.

If there is something wrong or difficult or just unlikable about my setting, let me know and I'll change it so it's better. :)


In stories there are three basic elements:

Plot: What is happening?

Setting: Where is it happening?

Characters: Who is it happening to?

For this challenge, I will give you a setting; it is your job to make it a story by creating the other two elements: characters and a plot.

Here is the setting:

A long train platform. The train station is in the middle of the road, between the lanes of two-way traffic. People must climb stairs to a bridge over the street and then back down another set of stairs to the platform in order to get to the train. It is a busy day, and traffic is racing by the station in both directions. The platform is open with no shelter, only a few benches for people to wait. It is a windy day. There is no snow or rain, but it is still very cold. There are terminals to buy train tickets spaced at random intervals all the way down the platform. A train is stopped on one side of the station, waiting for the passengers to finish boarding.

Word Limit: Minimum = none. Maximum = 450 words.

Judgment Day: OK, this is your last chance everyone!! MARCH 9 is the deadline. The winner of this challenge will be able to build their own "Fill in the Plot" challenge.

Questions, Concerns or Thoughts?: Comment or send me a personal message.

set Feb 14 by workingoutaname (538 points)
edited Mar 2 by workingoutaname

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Perfectly still

It was the first Friday of April and it was unusually cold for this time of year. There was no rain, but the clouds blocked the sun and the wind blew fiercly at the crowd gathered at the train station. The bell signaled that the train was about to depart and the crowd around it was slowly dispersing. 

The cars were whizzing by, trying to get home and away from the wind. Alicia had her coat wrapped tightly around her, but she was still shivering. The wind cut against her face, only half shielded by her black hair. Her train was late and she would have to spend another 20 minutes on the platform, shielded only by the other people around her.

Alicia was never a big fan of winter. She usually stayed indoors and the only reason she was out here was to buy supplies for a school project. She wasn't supposed to be here. She didn't want to be here. She closed her eyes in hopes it would all go away.

Alicia had always had a way of dealing with things by sheer will. She would wish for the rain to stop and pretty soon the coulds would part and the sun would seep through. She would dislike a schoolmate and they would change schools or schedules or something else happened that get them out of her way. She had always attributed it to luck, as if someone was looking out for her.

That Friday, she would learn that it wasn't true.

Maybe if I just want it hard enough, the wind will stop. She kept her eyes closed, but listened. She listened for the whistle of the wind and felt for its piercing cold. Seconds passed. Nothing. And then - it all stopped.

She opened her eyes slowly, carefully. A peek through one of them, frist, but it a moment, they both opened wide in disbelief. Not only did the wind stop, but so did everything else. The cars weren't moving, the people stood in mid-step and the piece of paper that was flying towards the bin now stood suspended in mid-air, as if it were held there by invisible strings. 

Alicia paled. She tried pinching herself to make sure she wasn't dreaming. Ow! That hurt! Seconds passed. Then minutes. She walked around, but still nobody moved. The wind had stopped completely and the temperature was appropriate for and April day. 

Hours passed. Then days. Alicia was all alone in a city full of people. All frozen, perfectly still. 

 

A month passed. Alicia was roaming the streets, lonely and desperate. In her mind, she was still trying to deduce what happened, but it didn't make sense. And then, she gave up. There was no point in trying to make sense of it all, she just wanted to wake up from this nightmare. She wanted to feel the wind again.

In her attempt to find the logic, it never occured to her to just try and wish it away. It would be too simple. But there was no harm in trying, right? She closed her eyes and with her whole heart, she wished things were back as they had been. Seconds passed. And then she felt the wind.

 

 

answered Mar 2 by Spots (867 points)
selected Mar 10 by workingoutaname
Sorry about the length. I was gonna shorten it by leaving an open ending, but I think it's better this way.
I like it just the way it is. That's really cool Spots! I could see it being part of a much longer story: her exploring the still city or going about her normal business as if nothing went wrong, in a state of denial. Yes, very interesting! But even as a stand alone piece it is really good. :)
Thanks! ;)
The torch is yours, Spots. Congrats!
Sigh. I knew this would happen. Ah well, I guess I'll have to make a better one then. :)
Btw, sorry for the late response, it's been crazy lately.
haha, no problem Spots. Everyone's been busy it looks like. That's life. :)