Finish The Story II

Question

Remember ‘finish the story no.1?’ Remember I said there will be ‘Finish The Story No.2?’ Well, this is the one! And if you entered no.1, then this challenge is for you!

For this challenge:

There is a sentence down below, which I made up and you have to carry on from there and finish the story. It is up to you in what way you do it e.g. dream, mystery, future, poetry, etc. Whatever Genre you like. It is not up to me, you choose that. You can even change the tone of the story/poem.

And no, no poetry accepted.

Sentence to continue from:

“I woke up on my birthday morning to find ...”
Above is the sentence you have to continue from. And the thing that is in your room has to be something very astonishing, gigantic. Maybe a troll? Something mysterious? Like...... brown, huge foot prints... or... something weird? Something that wasn’t there before? It has to be something strange, mysterious or scary.

OPTIONAL: If you want, you can only do a part 1, so it’ll keep the reader thinking and anxious to know what happens. Remember, this is optional. You do not have to. You can even enter your whole entire story if you like. But if you do part 1, be sure to enter it in this very challenge after it closes, or if there are more than one part 1’s, then I’ll set another, separate challenge for only you guys to enter your part 2’s. Nobody else.

JUDGING SYSTEM:

This time, I am not doing that points system! It is very hard. I will just do it regarding what one I like best. And if there’s a tie, then I’ll let other contributors decide.

Word Count for story:     Minimum = 200 words     Maximum = 872 words

EDIT: Here, before was word count for poetry but now I have removed that, as I have changed my mind. 
NO POETRY ACCEPTED! SORRY! 
Because of the rythmn/tone of the story, poetry won't suit this.

LOL! I did the word count totally randomly!!
 

Judgement Day: I will be judging on Tuesday, 18^th October. This leaves you with 2 and a half weeks. Shall there be no one or only one person who has responded by that day, I will lengthen the deadline.

Edit: Here, before was an announcement of my birthday. But I made this challenge like about a week ago but now, my birthday has passed now. It was on Monday. I turned eleven. But it was very fun! I'll telly you that! 

Should you have any concerns, worries, thoughts or questions...? Comment, or send me a personal message.

Good Luck and have fun!

Thanks!

Comments

cherry babe  chat to me :())

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Heey guys! So yes, finally I am getting to judge this! I've been waiting for this day for ages! I thought I wouldn't get to come on today but I did! So the winner is.........................

ROOM122! Congrats I loved your story.

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Guys! For those who only had one part, I will soon enter a challenge for you to enter your part 2! NOBODY ELSE CAN ENTER.
I am not sure if Spots, you have a part 2. I don't think so but I do definitely know about WON. And I think Room122 has a part 2 as well. So good luck you two (and maybe Spots) and better start thinking up a part 2 or writing it down now!! It'll be easier!

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No I don't have part 2.

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Okay, so which means only WON and perhaps Room122.

Answer 1

I woke up on my birthday morning to find a bunch of owls under my bed! It was kind of creepy! There were 101 owls under my bed! I went downstairs to see my mom. I said “Mom, why are there 101 owls under my bed?”

Mom said, “I have no idea.”

“Then who put them there?” I asked.

Then dad jumped in and said “What’s the problem?”

I said “There are 101 owls under my bed!”

Suddenly there was a knock on the door. It was my friends! They were dressed up in Halloween costumes. “This is not right,” I said to myself. It’s the middle of July!

“Come trick-or-treating with us,” they said.

“Okay…” I said. I went downstairs to get my costume and I saw a floating fish in mid-air. It looked like there was a cube of water floating around it. “This is highly unusual, on so many levels,” I said to myself.

I pinched myself to see if I was dreaming, but that didn’t work. I didn’t know if this was a dream or real.

Then I heard someone say “Wake up, sweetie!”

“What,” I thought, “I’m already awake!”

Then I smelled smoke from my birthday candles and opened my eyes. I looked around. My mom and dad were there holding my cake. My friends were all there behind my mom and dad. My fish was in my tank again. I looked out the window and saw an owl in the tree. I looked under my bed. No owls. “This looks better. So that was really all a dream. That explains why everything was so weird.”

There were lots of presents and I felt so happy that my birthday wasn’t going to be too weird after all.

The end…or is it?

Comments

Excellent, Room122! I love the shock of finding owls under your bed! That was a great idea. I like that the shock doesn't end at owls, but there are more surprises along the way: the costumes, the fish floating in a cube of water (a different kind of idea which I thought was great!). Making the pinch not wake you up right away added a sense of surprise as well.
All in all, nice job guys (and gals)! I'm excited to see what else your class comes up with. :)

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Haha lovely story! I LOVE it! I like how you made everything weird and how at the end you wrote "The end...or is it?" I think you should have "...or is it really?" or "...or is it really the end?"  And put "really" in Italic Bold. If you know what it is. Sorry if I say something you do not know the meanings cos you are only 7 or 8. But just saying, it's my opinion but that doesn't really matter. I really like the story.
But somewhere, I felt as if you were in a rush... you could have added a bit more detail to it and did it slowly. Maybe you were going somewhere? You were in a hurry, so the story was rushed, and it didn't have that fascinating feeling because of it. But overall I loved it but if you took your time and edited parts as well then it'd be better.  Yes, I think it needs a tiny bit more editing. But don't mind me. I am just correcting you and helping you to get better in your writing, this is how we groove on ThinkWrite! We help and take ideas from other contributors to make improve our writing and make it more interesting. I hope you read my comment and understood.
Because the reader won't really enjoy a rushed book and it might not even have a clue what's happening and they'll have to read the same phrase again and again. So that's why. Anyway, FAB story line! Even though it was quite rushed, you still might be able to win! You never know! And I understand you are only 7/8 so... you might not have realized.

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Room122? Congrats on your victory! If you have not read my comment of faults then please take some to read it to help you with your writing.

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Note from Miss D. - Hello, CherryBabe. Sorry for the delay in responding to this - we had a very busy beginning to the week and I've been away for a bit with a hurt back (I'm feeling much better now) so we haven't been able to check on things here. Tomorrow is a day off for my students (although I'll still be at work), but I promise we'll be around on Monday. I'm sure they'll be thrilled to find that you've chosen their response as best. :-) I'm not sure either if there is a part two to their story, but it does seem likely. :-)

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Thanks for letting me know, Miss D!
And I hope you are feeling much better now!

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We just realized that we hadn't thanked you for choosing our story as the best story. Thank you very much. We talked about it and decided that we don't have a part two for this story. Thank you anyway for giving us a chance to write a part two, but we don't have one right now. Sorry.

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Haha your welcome.
And no, that's completely fine. It means no one will after all win the part 2 challenge.

Answer 2

// This is a part 1, but I do not as of yet have a part 2 for it. The end remains a mystery even for me. I like it though - I think it's kind of funny and mysterious. NOTE: I know "gifter" isn't a real word but it gets my point across and anyways, I think it should be a real word. (haha) //

Humor, and also an Elephant.

I woke up on my birthday morning to find an elephant. No, I’m serious; there was an elephant in the room. His gray body cast a deep shadow on the yellow of my walls and the small elephant picture on my wall. The big blue bow tied around his waist contrasted well with my red curtains. Someone must have gotten it for me as a gift. At least this mysterious gifter had the presence of mind to buy a baby elephant. A full grown adult would have dwarfed the room, making my already undersized bedroom feel small and cramped. Even this baby was making me claustrophobic. He would definitely have to live outside.

“Who bought me the elephant?” I yelled upstairs as I was getting dressed; the elephant was watching me awkwardly. Like he would rather be anywhere else than watching a teenage girl get dressed. “Yeah, well I know a lot of guys who would kill for a chance at sitting where you are right now; a couple girls too.” I smirked at him. He just huffed and looked away.

“Guys?! Who bought me the elephant?” I opened my door but no one answered my calls. It was absolutely silent up there.

I ran from my room, carefully leading Leroy (what I had decided the elephant would be called) out of my door. He only had about half an inch of room on either side of him through the door, but he made it alright and sort of nodded at me as if saying thanks. He must have been claustrophobic in there too.

Comments

Yay you are on. Okay,now I am just about to read this....

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Okay, so I just read it and it is interesting. I love the tone of it. And I liked paragraph 2, where the girl is yelling and stuff. Very interesting, and mysterious. Because nobody answered when the girl yelled. And I like how you finally did a girl as the character for once. LOL!! Very goooood. And yeah, I like how you took my idea of doing a part 1. Excellent! =)

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Thanks Cherry. Yeah I figured what the heck, let's do a girl character. haha ;)

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Haha LOL ;) :P

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Loved it! Especially the title.
It got me thinking and I got an idea for a story, but I will only post it if you agree that I can post a story that is heavily influenced by yours.

Btw, just so you know, moderators can see all the hidden messages, so in case there's something you want really hidden, either edit the message before hiding it or use private messaging instead. I know it's irrelevant now, I just thought it was something everyone should know.

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I don't mind! Go ahead and post it. I'd love to see what my response has "inspired" you to do. =P

And okay, that's good to know. Usually when I hide stuff it's no big deal, I just think it was either irrelevant to the purpose of the site or unnecessary. Very rarely is it a "NO! I can't believe I said that!!!!!" moment. haha

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Yeah, Spots. If WON is okay with it, then I'd also LOVE to see what WON has inspired you to do! :) I like inspirations. It's one of the things that is most common with me. I get inspired many times a day, there's probably not a single day I've not! LOL! I like being inspired by other people/things.

And yeah it is good to know but as WON said that it was no big a deal. But... if there is a message I really want hidden then yes, I will Personal Message. Thanks! :-)

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hiya cherry babe i am hiding your comments

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Who are you?
And BTW, you can't. Only owners or moderators can. And Spots is a moderator.
Are you new? Welcome to ThinkWrite! Take time to read the rules and guidelines. I shall send you the link later.

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WON I loved your story too! Well done!!

Answer 3

 

A title with thirteen words in it (or just call the story thirteen)

I woke up on my birthday to find a complete lack of elephants in my room. Most of you will think now "Does she usually have elephants in her room?" The answer is no, I do not.

I was, however, expecting to get one for my birtday, as promised by my big sister. That's right. When I asked her what she was going to get me for my birthday, she specifically said I was getting a white elephant.

Wouldn't that be marvelous? Such a gorgious creature! With those big ears and the wiggling trunk. And in white! Not that dull grey that just looks dirty and plain. A pure, brilliant white! I would buy a big purple scarf and place it on its shoulders. And it would be the most beautiful elephant the world has ever seen. How lucky I was.

So you can imagine my disappointment when I opened my eyes this morning and, instead of a shining new elephant found – one great big nothing. That's exactly what I'm getting her – a huge white nothing with a purple scarf on it. Ha! That will show her. 

Comments

Ok, that's 200 words, including title. =P
Inspired by WoN.

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haha! That's awesome. xD It was short but sweet. I like this a lot; I love funny stories!
I was wondering what the title was all about, but you needed extra words. clever... xP

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Yeah, I was starting to type nonsense, so I opted for a long title instead and since it seemed like a silly idea to put a long title on a short story, I decided to just be frank. ;)
Thanks for the comment.
Also, for those who don't know what a white elephant is, look it up. It adds more to the story.

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I had no idea what a white elephant was. lol, you're right it adds a lot more to the story!

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Yeah, it is very good, Spots. Thanks for entering my challenge!

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Well done Spots! You did well too!