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The Biggest Lie Ever Told

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Write about what the biggest or most hurtful lie you ever told was. It can be true, made up, or partly true with some "embellishing" (or, lying, I guess - haha); that's up to you. You may also choose what form you write in (poem, story, etc.).

Word Count for Prose: Minimum = 100 words. Maximum = 300 words.

Word Count for Poetry: No minimum. Maximum = 20 lines.  Any type of poem will be accepted, e.g. rhyming, free verse, acrostic, etc.

I will judge this challenge in two weeks, on July 23. If no one or only one person has responded by that day, I will lengthen the deadline.

EDIT: I may be away from the computer on Saturday. If this is the case, the winner will be announced on Monday. Sorry guys!

set Jul 9, 2011 by workingoutaname (538 points)
edited Jul 21, 2011 by workingoutaname
Only one week remaining!! Get your responses in!!!!!! haha ;)
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7 Responses

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I am a liar.

I don’t mean that I tell the occasional white lie or that I sometimes edit the truth to get myself out of trouble or make myself seem better. I mean I’m a liar.

It’s hard for me to tell you what the biggest lie I ever told was, because my entire life is a lie. So, maybe that’s the biggest lie, but it’s not a lie I’m telling, it’s a lie I’m living.

Everyone who knows me knows a different me. I don’t know which of these is the real me. Maybe all of them. Maybe none of them.

I lie to everyone. I lie to myself.

On the front of my shoulders I have tattoos of the drama masks – comedy on my left shoulder, tragedy on my right shoulder. I got them because I am involved in theater. I got them because I’m always wearing a mask. I don’t know how to be any other way.

I can flip a switch and become someone else. I change my personality to what will please whoever I’m with. I want to be who everyone wants me to be. So I am.

But it’s all a lie.

And it’s my life.

I am a liar.
answered Jul 22, 2011 by midnightpoet (579 points)
edited Jul 22, 2011 by midnightpoet
Wow. This is excellent! I really connected to this story, if that makes sense. I guess what I'm trying to say is I really enjoyed reading this. ;)
It was a tough decision, I was totally torn between a few of the responses! But as soon as I read this I knew it would win. I love the style and flow of the writing here. Good job, Jesi!
Thank you very much!
Hey midnight :-) Long time girl...

I'm a liar too. My tag "another ronism" kinda explains it all. I exaggerate all the time. But in my defense I am just trying to make stories more interesting for the listener. Not to impress them about me (does that make sense). I have always done this and my one friend, Aaron, who is pretty smart, picked up on this in high school and would always say, when I'd start talking in that particular tone, "Here comes another Ronism."

Also - the same friend labeled me another time with an apt moniker that you might like. He called me a "social chameleon" because, like you, I can easily be one person in one situation and a complete other person in another situation. I have always feared my coworkers running into my family or friends. This would define my worlds colliding and would be horrible because they would each wonder who in the hell the other was talking about (me).

So - I know what you mean
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The biggest lie
 
The biggest lie I ever told,
From which a story will unfold,
Is one that I was born quite poor.
Now what to do, I am unsure.
 
She trusted me to be sincere
I let her down, just out of fear.
I wanted her to love just me
And not the things that I could give.
 
Now I want her to be my queen,
But first of all, I should come clean.
How do I tell her who am I,
When all she'll see is one big lie.
answered Jul 9, 2011 by Spots (867 points)
Wow, that's really good. I love that although what the lie is, is told right away, we don't quite understand what it means until the last stanza. Good rhyming too. Very cool! =)
Thanks! It feels good to be writing again.
VERY close second, Spots! And good on ya for being the only poem in the running!! xD
Thanks.
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The biggest lie I've ever told was when I said that I was not allowed to touch cats or eat mushrooms.I then continued with the lie saying that I was related to Micheal Jackson and that he had that as well.I then said that I was going to his funeral and that I wasn't going to school tomorrow.The next day I pretended that my head really hurt every time I sat up and I couldn't go to school.Oooops!!

answered Jul 9, 2011 by Formacal (19 points)
Nice humor in this response, Formacal! Welcome to ThinkWrite. ;)
Hey, Formacal, I just noticed you're about 18 words below the word limit (I don't know why I didn't count it when I first read it). Could you edit it to fit the word count range I have set up, please? If you want to be considered for being chosen as best response, it has to be between 100 and 300 words. It's sitting at 82, according to MS Word. A couple more sentences should do it.
Maybe some more information about why you lied and who you lied to? It also may make the piece more interesting and well-rounded to know details like that.
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The Players:

 

            8 people were sitting in my house. They weren’t the only ones I invited but as luck would have it this group decided to show up. My younger brother “Shane” sat directly across from me (for the sake of animosity I’ve take some liberty with names). On his left was my best friend “Ron.” On Ron’s left sat the girl he likes (coincidentally she is Shane’s ex) “Susan.” On the other side of Susan was “Abby” (the girl Shane likes). She sat next to me and to my left was (the guy who is hopelessly in love with her) “James.” Across the table Susan only has eyes for James, and as if this love pentagram wasn’t complicated enough, the next three people have their own triangle going on. In order sat; my sister’s boyfriend “Jon,” my sister “Anna” (they are of course in the middle of a fight), and finally a friend of mine who is blindly infatuated with her, “Sawyer”.

            This normally wouldn’t be comical except for the fact that I am the only one who completely understands every situation therefore every action I took that night had to be a lie to someone. The subtle code I had to talk in was annoying, but the infinite possibility of inside jokes I got to drop more then made up for it. Sitting in that group was so absurd that I was forced into fits of silent laughter while everyone else stared at each other with animosity.

The Game:

            What could make this night more interesting? How about a drinking game, How about a drinking game without alcohol? When you take a game that is based entirely on one person’s power to make other people do whatever they want, and take away the alcohol. It turns into a cutthroat game of humor used to cover up real anger (for everyone but me). I love it.

            The first round started without a winner and the game progressed fairly silent. There were a few chuckles, some pointless filler conversation, and a few unintentionally awkward comments. Including Susan telling Ron “uh, no not interested.” But finally it comes to a close with Ron being the victor (and here comes the real beauty of this situation). The winner of each round gets to make up a rule. This rule can be anything, absolutely anything. Ron decided that no one can use another player’s first name or they get skipped.   

            This of course immediately upped the difficulty as well as the humor. Before everyone had played his or her first card four names were spoken, and four people were skipped. This time the game progressed with more purpose. Clear strategies came into focus; every male (except for me) tried their best to secretly help the girl they liked. This made all three girls at the table inexplicable perfect at the game and completely changed the different player’s power.

            This hand Susan won, and her rule was no talking at all. This turned out to be useless for everyone else but a huge amount of comedy for me. As soon as the cards were dealt talking ceased and every phone opened. Text messages however are hard to decipher for deeper meaning and for the twenty minutes of that round I was forwarded every message that passed from a female to her suitor; for some reason they thought I could decipher female texts.

            -should I play three 5s this early or wait till I can go out? I need ur advice-

            -whats going on with anna? she flirting with sawyer? whats jon think?-

            -what are you doing tomorrow? I need to go run some errands but I don’t wanna drive by myself all day-

            Seriously! looking at their faces as they sent me those texts was priceless. The round came to a close with Ron winning again. In the time it takes for the cards to be dealt the winner has unlimited power. He made Shane (Susan’s Ex, my brother) go get everyone drinks. He returned from the kitchen with several cups, only two were anything but hot water. He gave the two girls he wasn’t related to these cups (Susan his ex, and Abby the girl he likes).

            The rest of the round passed with sparing hilarity caused by the fact that you weren’t allowed to look anyone in the eye. Even without eye contact the anger, flowing around the table full of alpha males verbally sparring in a strange code over the three females, was overbearingly evident. Shane won this round and made a rule that skipped his two rivals (Ron [likes his Ex] and James [likes the girl he likes]) every time anyone else was skipped. Of course this caused them to be the last two left in the game and they battled it out for last place, the honor of which went to James.

            After four more rounds of ironic comments, awkward laughing, and rude acts based on hidden agendas, most people decided to go home. I had never held in that kind of laughter that long. As soon as the door closed it came out. Heavy room shaking, can’t stand up, literally rolling on the floor, laughter poured out as my angry siblings went to their rooms. The best part about the entire night was that despite all the tension despite the fact that I am the only one who found it funny we all agreed were playing again at the next available date. 

answered Jul 9, 2011 by leodregden (197 points)
edited Jul 10, 2011 by leodregden
Ok I edited out as much as possible and is still double the word limit, sorry. Im keeping it on here just because I would like some feedback.  You don't have to consider it when deliberating since I completely broke your rules
I loved the story, and I'd love to learn more about that game. It was well written and you kept it interesting. A few more details would spice it up, but you'd need a much higher word count for that. Maybe you should give it a go, since you've already crossed the limit. Now that you've sparked our curiosity, we deserve a bit more. ;-)
Yes, give us some more of it! I liked it and I want to read it before you edited details out! No problem about the word count, by the way, the story is still good; by all means leave it here for people to see and comment on. =)
EDIT: I just read the first version you posted (it got emailed to be before you could edit it, I guess) and that one makes much, much more sense to me! If you still have it, you should post that version. You're already over the word limit, so it won't win, but I did like all the details that were in it the first time.
ok reposting the original, also the real game is called "El presidente"
I like this version better.
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The Biggest Lie

The world is full of lies, from “military intelligence” to the “happily married man”.  How many people have claimed that the “cheque is in the post”? How many people have said “I love you” to gain some short term gratification? When a teacher explains something complicated in simple terms, is it a lie or a step towards the truth? We all live in a world full of lies and deceptions, from Santa Clause to the second hand car salesman and on to Area 51. A world of “trust me”, “this won’t hurt”, “it will be all right” and “don’t worry”! Yet the biggest lie must be when a politician speaks of peace but means war.
answered Jul 11, 2011 by Saxon (596 points)
I like this. I like all the questions. I also like how you were talking about all the lies in such a "matter-of-fact" way, but there is still some emotion there. Really good.
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IT'S MY LIFE, NOW.

In 2003, at the end of my junior year, I needed a break from a bad relationship and a disastrous spring semester.  After considering my options, I borrowed $5,000 and decided to spend the summer in Australia. It was a completely irresponsible act, yet at the time it sounded like the perfect plan to me.

I got here and I loved it!  Sydney was unlike any place I had ever been. So, instead of catching my return flight that August, I decided to stick around.  At the end of a month, I was broke, with no job in sight. No one would hire me since I was an unregistered alien.  (Strange term that.)

Rather than giving up and heading home like a normal person, I put together a plan. At the U of Sydney's library I got the names of 10 girls all about 2 to 3 years older then me.  Checked them out online and found a Bette Schaffer who looked a little like me. She had a Degree in Elementary Education, had married and moved to the UK.  Perfect! 

It was easy enough to request her transcript, get a copy of her teaching creds as well as a replacement passport.  I was set! 

I won't say where I am living today, since I would hate this to be read by the wrong person  and have my "little" ruse discovered.

It’s been 8 years now and I couldn't be happier. I can "honestly" say that the work I do with children in this urban paradise has helped more young minds than any problems that my change of identity may have created. 

In the end, I don’t consider my new life as a harmful or a hurtful lie, but it is BIG and has created a state of constant awareness that is always with me.

answered Jul 22, 2011 by DayDreamer (21 points)
haha, I like this one too! wow. tough decision I have to make here!
The biggest lie I ever told was when I was about ten years old. I took my three sisters and brother to my grandma's house from  where I lived on foot. My parents were not at home as they had to attend a funeral.They left the resposibility of my brother and sisters on me as I am the oldest! My grandma's house is about half an hour's walk from my abode. As soon as I arrived at my grandma's house, my grandfather was amazed when he saw us.
"Does your father know?" he asked.
"Yes" I replied.
One can imagine what happened  to me when the truth surfaced!!!!
jspi, you accidentally put this response as a comment. Copy it as a response so you get the points for it! (Click "respond" under the description of the challenge and paste into that box.)
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"TLA" by Ron

My greatest lie? Hmmm. Okay.

It was the early nineties. Computers were low-tech but avante-garde. I worked for a computer company. And that company wanted very badly to sell computers to the Texas State Government.

I worked in the service department but was very, very young and had no business savvy at all.

I had this strange talent with Microsoft Excel. I could make it do anything. I just "got" it.

I got invited to this state government trade show in Austin so I could show off Microsoft Excel if any accountant-types came around. But mostly it was procurement types and state contract types and it was all greek to me.

The high-powered sales people had grown bored one slow afternoon during the show and had gone to find decent bar be que. We were, after all, in Texas.

I was left to manage our booth.

And a man approached.

And he started asking questions.

It turned out he was from the Texas Department of Corrections and Rehabilitation. He was looking for ten thousand personal computers for the entire states correctional services.

I showed him how I could make a working clock with Excel pie charts and radar charts.

He was impressed.

Then he asked a question.

He said. Are you a hub?

What the hell? I thought. I should just say I have no idea what he's asking. I should reveal that I am, in fact, just a kid and the guys'll be back from bar be que in a sec.

But I've always been burdened with a brain.

So I looked at this as a puzzle.

What is a "hub"? It's a central point of a network. That sounds relevant. It is about computers. But we haven't been talking networks and he asked if we "were" a hub.

Hub? Hub?

My mind jumped to TLA. At the time this was a funny acronymn for Three-Letter-Acronymn. There were so many back then like IBM, VGA, etc...

HUB... HUB?

I put on my very best poker face and said: "We are an asian-woman-owned company and for $30 million we will be whatever hub you want!"

We got the contract. It was ultimately worth well over $30 million. I never received a dime for the sale.

It turns out that HUB stands for Historically-Underutilized-Business. I never guessed that but I threw everything into my answer except the kitchen sink.

Historically-Underutilized-Business is a special way of saying "set-Aside" for disadvantaged businesses. Political correctness was the way of Austin and my "guess"; no; my LIE was a total bluff but it worked.

Maybe instinct and reaction doesn't count against big old lies but this was big, big, big - it was $30 million fucking dollars. That's a BIG lie. And I've always been proud.

(unedited) Ron

(edit: PS)

I left out the best part. We were not, in fact, an asian-woman-owned company. We were a dick-head-white-guy owned company. But guess what - no one in the entire Texas State Government ever checked the validity of my Johnny-on-the-spot answer.

Talk about "LOL" (another TLA BTW)

answered Aug 15, 2011 by anotherronism (259 points)
edited Aug 15, 2011 by anotherronism
That was average. Far below your standards. It seems like you could have told the same story in 1/4 of words. It's as if you were just trying to retell the story and weren't thinking about the writing at all. I can't say there's anything wrong with it, but there's also nothing about it that stands out.
Btw, welcome back, even if it's only a brief appearance.
Ahhh boo hoo :-(

Just kidding. Spots - I wrote this with little thought. I just kinda rambled it out as if I were speaking a story on the spot.

But it was not totally without thought. And I'm suprised you missed it.

THIS is the biggest lie. This story. Or at least that was the idea when I started it.

Oh well... Another failed attempt at humor (or whatever it was supposed to be)

Later,
Ron
"I just kinda rambled it out as if I were speaking a story on the spot." - that part I got. Or, at least, that's exactly what it looked like.
The other part - completely missed me.