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Poem Time!!!!!!!!

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Write a poem, of any kind... maybe acrostic, rhyming or shape poems? It can be any type of poem you like on any subject you like! But soon, I might doing (after this challenge) a challenge just like this but ... on a specific subject! But for this one, it can be any subject you like!! It can also be funny! It can be long or short!

This is a VERY short one!...

Hi, I am a bumble bee, cute as can be!
Don't do one THAT short, though. Mine was just an example but you have to do at least 4-5 lines but AT LEAST, it can be more lines and there's no maximum it can be as many lines as you like, just has to be 4-5 lines.

I will be doing a  PROPER example (well, my poem) soon! And I hope you will like it! x

Enjoy & Good Luck! xx

PS 2morrow (21/06/11) is the LONGEST DAY OF THE YEAR! aww gonna miss it once its passed :( then its gonna start be short again!
set Jun 20, 2011 by CherryBabe (280 points)
edited Jun 20, 2011 by CherryBabe
Is there a time limit on this, Lolly, or can I still enter?
Oh yeah, I think I forgot to enter the time limit on this AGAIN! LOL
But you can still enter
Guys! I'll judge in mid-July
LOL i just entered a challenge and now i have to do it all over again cuz the internet connection got muddled somehow!
ATTENTION EVERYONE!
Today is the day to decide who the winner is and I am torn who to choose!
I like Plr1103, then I like WON's one and then I like Froggie's!
So, what I am going to say is that I am going to let you all vote!
Person with most votes will win!
But remember! This isn't about the winning, it's about the hard work and effort and expression you have put into your poems!
P.S you are only allowed ONE vote!
I vote for Froggie's. Oh, and I don't think you're going to get many votes here, Lolly. You better choose for yourself!!! ;)
hmm i'll wait and see...
but i can't decide for myself!
Okay,
ATTENTION EVERYONE!
I have finally come to the point where I have decided who has won this challenge! It was a very tough decision as you were all fantastic!
So, first I will tell you the two runner ups, who are........
WON and Plr1103 !!!
Well done!! I LOVED your poems and I think you should be proud of yourself!
So... I think that means the winner is quite obvious now, isn't it ?
Yup! It's Froggie, for his remarkable poem, The Rainbow!
What a lovely poem!
I think all of these poems should be published one day, truly!

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The Rainbow.

 

The girl of blue and girl of green met across a meadow.
They then found, eventually, the boys of red and yellow.
It wasn’t long before the group had grown in size to seven,
Whereupon they all set out to build a stair to heaven.

Not the heaven of the Bible, nor the afterlife of Greece,
Just the clouded sky above them which held promises of peace.
Yet, as they climbed the sky grew black, as sadness filled the air; 
For unbeknown to the happy troupe, there was one forgotten pair:

The girl and boy of backward view, who never seemed to fit,
Had tried to join the upward quest despite the holy writ
Which stated that their preferences in love and happiness
Were nothing short of evil sin and mental illnesses.

Guilt-ridden by the lonely sight of these two far below them,
The seven children sped back down and sang aloud their anthem.
It talked of freedom and of fun and all that Sun had given
But also of remorse for things they wished to be forgiven.

And as they touched their weary feet upon the meadow’s ground,
Each held out an open hand and called the two around.
By this sight the darkened sky was overcome with reverence
And wept to see the future grow from innocent acceptance.

answered Jul 4, 2011 by Froggie (190 points)
For what it's worth, my vote is for Froggie's. =) It is beautiful and the rhyming adds something really special to it.
hehe I agree.
I am torn right now!
It's time to judge and I can't decide who wins!
Everyone's soo good!!
I vote for Froggie- this is absolutley lovely and so well done! BRAVO! All of the entries were very good and done well but there is something about this one that is beyond special. ;p)
that's 2 votes for froggie's then!
Well done, Froggie!
Congratulations, you did well, as so did all the others!
Loved your one!
It was very tough to decide though, but I finally came to a point to decide Froggie wins, although they were all very good!
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Here is 1 example. It's kinda a rhyming one... I am not sure what to call it but I am sure you guys might help me decide!
Here it goes...

Lie beneath a spreading tree
With golden flowers in the sun. 
Count to five on all the petals,
Never think of five plus one.
Watch the building-crammed horizon,
Sky no longer meeting ground.
Watch the golden flowers wither
Watch the golden dreams fall down.

I have another one, it's also a rhyming one, sorta...not sure what to call it either.. maybe 'A new life has begun'? Here it goes..........

Acceptance of darkness
The heart of the sun
The battle is over
The people have won.

Aether of sunlight
Dust of the stars
Eyes against nothing
Know nothing is far.

Blue opalescence
That holds in the night
Vanish forever
In infinite light.

Eyes of the heavens
Hand of the sun
The old life is over
A new has begun.

Thank you, and good luck!!

answered Jun 20, 2011 by CherryBabe (280 points)
You're really good for your age.
He he thank you! BTW, how do you know how old am I? Did you see my comment where someone asked if there's anyone who's 11???
Yes, that was very good. Well done.
(And your age is kinda obvious from the way you write. I didn't see the comment you mentioned, but if I had to guess, 11 is exactly what I'd say.)
Thank you!
And is it?? Well, you almost got my age! I am 10, but I will be 11 in October
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There's Always a Rainbow

Just a short time ago it was always November,
Day after day of gray.
If there was any sunshine,
I sure don't remember;
The clouds were in the way.

Then slowly the mist began to rise,
Lifted by the words of truth.
Tears and pain had sharpened my vision;
Tender hands uncovered my eyes.
I wept for the passing of my youth.

Voices whispered, "It's not too late"
And slowly I began to smile.
Another chance, a new beginning...
God is the master of my fate.
The rainbow appeared after 'while.

answered Jun 20, 2011 by plr1103 (143 points)
Aww! I loved reading that! As always, I also loved this. It was an extremely good poem. I loved the rhyming you have put in and you always put in much effort into it. I can see you want to become an author!
xx Keep rocking as always, and never back down! xx Best wishes from me and I know one day you will become very famous! xx
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                         As we were laughing one day,

About pickles and bananas in Subway,

The pickle floated to space,

And the banana gave a chase,

So that it snowed pickles and bananas in Canaday. 

answered Jun 22, 2011 by Lemon (115 points)
Just so you know, I had to make up the word Canaday because Canada had to rhyme with Subway, so I made it Canaday. I do have poetic liscence.
Very good! And I get the Canaday part. And really? Do you actually have a licence? Very good!
Keep rocking as always! x
Awww, a limerick. And a cute one at that. I love the topic! But the syllable count  is all wrong, it's messing up the rhythm. I'm not really sure what you can do with it and still keep all the contents. Maybe try shortening words, like: " 'bout pickles and b'nanas". There's still to many of them, but maybe you could find a balance?

P.S. Lolly, "poetic license" is a figure of speech. Look it up on Google, that should clear it up.
Okay, I'll look it up....
And I have a question if you don;t mind... Are you just randomly going round correcting people?? I don't mean to mind you or anything, just asking casually.... I hope you didn't mind, I was just asking
No, Lolly, I'm not going round randomly correcting people. I was looking at what's new since I haven't been on TW in a while and I commented where I thought I needed to. If you don't want me commenting on anything you write, just say so. I think you got most of my comments because you were writing most lately. :) I always speak my mind and it always with good intentions, but I know that it can come across in the wrong way.
no no i was just asking casually u can comment wherever u like
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Tunnels

These tunnels used to scare me,
and I used to be able to write with my left hand and it didn’t make a difference.
I used to think that the lines on the road were for decoration,
but I’d pretend to drive from the back seat anyway.

I remember when cell phones were only for mommys and daddys,
and I remember a small room with a bean bag chair and a tape deck.
I remember when the biggest word I knew was lieutenant,
but I’d write stories with small words to fit my small physique.

Having fun used to be more important than anything,
and picture day was the only thing to be stressed out about.
I used to make egg carton flowers and give them to my mom,
but I didn’t like the painting center.

I remember being cocky about tetherball,
and I remember a tiny brown hamster with tiny black eyes.
I remember indoor recess; we’d play cards and checkers in the classroom,
but outside it was raining.

I used to sing along to kids songs.
“Row, Row, Row Your Boat” and “Twinkle Twinkle Little Star”,
And love used to be easy; it just meant we were going to bed.
“Goodnight, mom, dad, I love you.”

I remember
when visiting the Grandparents meant fun and vacation,
and I remember when it started meaning hospital.
I remember when my mom noticed my nana forgetting,
and I remember sitting in their living room when she asked us who we were.

Graduation used to be a long ways away.
And the future used to mean, “what middle school are you going to?”
Jobs were chores the teachers asked you to do,
and friends were the kids who cheered you on when you tried to get across the monkey bars.
Even though you had tried before a million times.

And These tunnels used to scare me.
Not anymore.

answered Jun 30, 2011 by workingoutaname (538 points)
edited Jun 30, 2011 by workingoutaname
Same here.
Btw, was it you who wrote that comment but then hid it??
Well whoever it was, the reason I wasn't really on ThinkWrite in the past few days, is not because our fight. It was because I got no responses or comments, and the comments that came in the email, weren't of any use to me, so I was bored and had nothing much to do on ThinkWrite, so that is why I wasn't on. But it's nothing to get worried about, and thank you for saying I am talented and all. I appreciate it very well.
And to be honest, I have also been missing being here on ThinkWrite, but I was getting bored, and took a break from it, maybe cos I didn't have much to do.!
There's lots to do!!! haha. ;) Look at the new challenges. I know at least one of them involves poetry (I set it up, haha), which may be interesting for you to enter. =D
I know haha I did........... but there wasn't any new ones then, now there are though
True. :) Also, I'm wondering, when are you going to judge this again? You said mid July, but do you have a specific date in mind?
Em....
Either tomorrow (15th) or Saturday 16th, because in between is mid July, but probably on Saturday